Similar, but…

The vague possibility that one kind of story has parts that make other kinds of stories, but similar.



Review, revisiting, whatever ya call it

Revisiting a story I have been working on, on and off, over several years. The part reviewed today sounds okay, but could be better. Overall, the story has made significant progress since I first begun. Meanwhile, republishing at Pete’s articles every week now rather than every day so have more time to spend on storytelling.


Different versions of a scene can be helpful, but the first may be best

If there are different versions of the same scene, or they are written differently, one can see the differences between the versions and see which is best.

Sometimes, the original scene can be better in comparison to the second or third version.

Sometimes, one gets too involved with the original scene and edits too much.

Comparing a second version of a scene with the first version of the scene may prove the first is better.

Too much

This was too much in the final analysis, when it goes too far and too strange. Let me set the picture.

I’ve been reading a scene from the novelization of Star Wars: Return of the Jedi that works as a transition to the next phase of the story. It’s important for setting up what follows.

In the movie it is a very sentimental scene as the rebels try and convince the natives to join them on their mission. The scene is also about Luke Skywalker walking into his destiny, to face the villain, not that he’s there yet, but it’s coming.

The book is longer in describing how the rebels try and persuade the natives (The furry ‘ewoks’) to come on board, but this detail is not in the movie, an appeal to the natural environment of the ewoks. If it was included in the original screenplay I can imagine why they decided to leave it out of the movie. I found it almost laughable. Too much. I like trees, but Princess Leia telling the ewoks, do it for the trees, was the last straw.